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考研英语(二)小作文范文点评

51.Directions:

Some international students are coming to your university. Write then an e-mail in the name of the Students’ Union to

1) extend your welcome, and

2) provide some suggestions for their campus life here.

You should write about 100 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use “Li Ming”instead.

Do not write the address. (10 Points)

参考范文

Dear friends:

I am very glad to hear that you would come to our school. Firstly I will extend to you our warmest welcome as you are coming to our university.

Before you come here, I will try to make some useful suggestions for you. First of all, it is better to learn Chinese well as soon as possible. Perhaps it’s not easy to master a language in a short time, but it is very important in your daily life. Secondly, it is necessary to know some cultural differences between two countries. Otherwise, you will meet some unnecessary troubles.

At last, you should get to know the weather and prepare for the clothes in each season.

We are looking forward to seeing you soon and wish everything goes well.

Sincerely yours,

Li Ming

内容结构

首段开门见山表达了自己对对方的欢迎之情,明确表达了文章的主要意思和目的;接着根据题目要求,给对方提供了有关学校生活的建议。信的正文简明扼要,条理清楚。以First of all、Secondly、At last标明顺序,以使文章层次清分明、脉络合理。(首先,尽快学好汉语,或许在很短的时间内掌握一门语言很困难,但在你的日常生活中会很有作用。其次,要了解两个国家之间的文化差异,否则你会遇到一些不必要的麻烦。最后,了解天气情况,准备好每个季节要穿得衣服。)

最后,结尾部分既没有过分使用华丽辞藻,更没有粗鲁无礼,而是恰当好处地表达期待之情,祝福对方一切顺利。整个作文思路清晰,目标明确,语气恰当。既注重了语言的正式和礼貌,遵循了书信的交际原则,而且把握了细节,提供了合情合理的建议。

二、语言表达

应用文的实际用途决定了其语言应该简洁明了,不求复杂多变或者辞藻华丽。用词准确是本范文取得高分的关键之一。如extend to you our warmest welcome(我们向你表示最热烈的欢迎);make some useful suggestions(提出几条有用的建议);in a short time(在很短的时间内);wish

everything goes well(希望一切顺利);meet some unnecessary troubles(遇到一些不必要的麻烦)。其次是文章中的语法用得十分准确,几乎没有什么错误。 I am very glad to hear that 中that引导了一个宾语从句。注意不要混淆It is better to do sth.和You’d better do sth.这两个不同的句式结构。此外,文中多次出现了It is+形容词+to do不定式的结构,该句型相对简单,语言通俗易懂。

以上是从内容结构和语言表达两个方面对此篇范文进行了点评。希望同学们以此为鉴,能够写出更高质量的英语作文。

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